The beautiful winter

I recently sent you this topic but you did not complete the assignment correctly… please let me know if you can finish it for me

1.)  Complete the last portion of the Point of View Paper.

2.)  Get feedback on your complete draft of Point of View Paper from an outside reader.

First, you’ll need to finish the assignment.

The last portion of this assignment is simple.  Reflect on what you’ve done.  Why does any of this matter?  How do these tools relate to other writing you’ve done, other writing you’ve read, etc.?  How does (or how will) any of this apply to you?

Here’s a student example of the last portion of this assignment.  (Again, this is the same student who focused on Pillsbury Crossing in his positive and negative descriptions, and whose rhetorical analysis was included above.)


While writing this assignment, I noticed that while we observe things everyday, choosing the right words to describe and observation is difficult and important.  While walking in the park the other day, I noticed how the wind picked up, and I tried to think about how I would describe it.  I realized that my descriptions would differ, depending on whether I was in a pleasant or unpleasant mood.  I also noticed how choice of words can influence a reader’s perceptions.  For example, I’ve recently read several articles on the home-run race.  One author reported that Sammy Sosa was beating Mark McGwire, but another focused on Mark McGwire, writing that he was ahead of last year’s pace, so he wasn’t technically “losing” the home-run race.  Presentation of facts and phrasing of observations can be vital to crafting a good story that grabs the reader’s attention; it can also sway the reader’s opinions in many ways.

Second, I strongly recommend you get some feedback on your complete draft.

In this unit, you will want to revise your own work to the best possible quality.  I strongly recommend that in addition to reviewing your work yourself, you find yourself an outside reader—someone who will read your work and offer you suggestions for revisions.

You have two options in choosing an outside reader:

* You can find someone on your own to read your work (ie. your spouse, one of your kids, a friend, a neighbor).

* You can sign up for the Peer Review Option by emailing me.  (I’ll set up an email list, so that you and 2-3 of your classmates can email each other your drafts and get feedback.)

Here are some questions you’ll want to keep in mind when revising your Perspective Paper.

The Two Descriptions

1.)  Do the two descriptions offer contrasting impressions of your place, without changing the facts?

2.)  Do each of the descriptions incorporate all of the tools of the Writer’s Toolbox?  Are each of these rhetorical tools used to their fullest advantage?

3.)  Are both descriptions well-organized, and easy to follow?

The Rhetorical Analysis

1.)  Are each of the five rhetorical tools discussed?

2.)  Does each paragraph follow the claim-support structure, making a general claim that clarifies the feature to be discuss, and then offering examples of how the feature was used and to what effect?  Do these examples seem adequate and appropriate?

3.)  Are transitions used to move the reader from paragraph to paragraph?

The Reflection

1.)  Is the reflection at least one paragraph long, using appropriate transitions to move us from idea to idea?

2.)  Does the reflection offer a sense of why/how the concepts of this assignment matter, beyond the classroom setting?

The beautiful winter:
The sun is on its last legs in the far west horizon of the Sabine forest in East Texas. The alleys and the small glades between the trees reflect gold as the sun washes them with its red, yellow and orange wavelengths, and one can feel the twilight. The green moss that carpets the forest floor augments a touch of nature. The woods prepare to sleep, but their disrobing and their whispers feel sweeter than just a mere good-night. Little winds amuse in a hide and seek game, and the trembling shadows seem to take pleasure in the game. They are all blooming, some in red, like the Red Pine, some in white, like the White Pine and the cherry. They are glad that winter cannot limp.
The weariness of winter:
On the edge of this forest lays a small hut, so bleak and lifeless. The look on the owner of the hut does not only portray sad feelings, but also disillusionment. He sinks into melancholy as the sun sinks in the far horizon. He wishes for its white dazzling rays but not the scattered and fading violet rays. It’s getting dark and cold. The snow is whirling violently outside his hut. He would rather keep warm, but he is running out of dry wood, and the freezing weather pleases at smothering the fire. He dreads sleeping, but not as he dreads waking up, only to find his path to town deeply covered in snow and he will have to dig another path. He wishes there were visitors, but even the animals have kept to themselves. His most occasional friend, the woodchopper is nowhere to be found, or heard. He stares at the small window to his hut, but he meets a blank stare from the sunflowers close to the shed. They are also weary of the cold weather. He wishes the season would put on a dress.

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